Thursday, April 29, 2010

More More More More Novel in a Paragraph

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A word of explanation: I am writing a novel where short snippets will hopefully tell a story all by themselves but will also combine with other short snippets to reveal a deeper story. Here in my blog, perhaps once a week, I will share a few snippets, but in no sequence for logical order. That part comes much later.
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Tipping Point
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The tipping point came about because of the Girl Scouts. Catherine mentioned she had been a Troop Leader in Malaysia.
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“The girl scouts,” Casey laughed, “That’s worse than being a Republican.”
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The response was immediate. “Listen Casey, what the frick is your problem with the Girl Scouts? They help girls all over the world.” Then Catherine added, “I am still a card carrying active Girl Scout.”
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Casey could not muffle her laughter. That was her second mistake.
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“If you can’t handle that, I have nothing more to say to you. We are too different, that’s all. So there,” Catherine was furious.
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Casey tried to interrupt several times. She apologized. She said she had been thinking of the Boy Scouts, not the Girl Scouts. She ever so gently raised the issue of homophobia, her third mistake: all in the span of 15 seconds.
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“What are you talking about?”, Catherine screamed, “We don’t talk about sex with the girls. We don’t ask about sexual preference. That whole subject would never come up. These are little girls. They don’t even know that word. Are you crazy?”
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Steaming, Catherine hung up with a bang. When she called back within the hour, she and Casey seamlessly transitioned to talk about art and recipes and the impossibility of finding love and levity through the internet.

15 comments:

  1. Oh, dear. Oh, Oh, dear. What could one say and be honest and truthful about what one learns with the passage of time? Not much, I am afraid in this case. Nothing truly important.

    How much olive oil is needed to sautee that conversation? Seamlessly indeed.

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  2. Yikes. I have a feeling that's not the only land mine Casey will step on.

    More please....

    ;)♥

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  3. Huh. There must be a whole lot underneath the surface relationship between these two...I think Catherine is now wary of any dig about things she does or thinks by Casey. I think Casey knows it...and I second lolo, there'll be more land mines Casey will step on!

    Looking forward to the next snippet from your book, kj...you do keep my interest up.

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  4. allegra, ♥. i love your use and selection of words. whatever you write i could read in every season, indoors and out. and, of course, your observational skills are seamless as that conversation.
    xoxo

    lo, land mines are acoming! atmospheric eruptions even. thank you, thank you. ♥

    thank you, marion. i realize i am writing a psychological novel and the layers and uncoverings may surprise me and i hope you too. ♥

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  5. Fun! This made me laugh, is that inappropriate? :-). Great writing Kj.
    xoxo

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  6. but, as a former "be prepared" girl scout, and amateur psychologist, didnt Casey set all this up by scoffing at Catherine's comment about girl scouts? Although I think Casey's comment is funny, I can understand how Catherine, to whom being a GS leader seems to be important, might get riffled at Casey making fun of being a GS leader. Gripping even though a snippet

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  7. Powerfully written paragraphs.... I guess much of this hits so close to my heart that I didn't find it funny, but full of pain and sadness. This is your "War Story", KJ..... and as Lo says, I KNOW there will be more landmines, plus, nuclear blasts and bomb bursts.

    You have come out of this war - a battle-scared Veteran....but, you have SURVIVED and earned your "Purple Heart".

    This is going to be one incredible novel.....

    Have a WONDERFUL, WONDERFUL WEEKEND! The "Three Graces" will shine - please raise your glasses Westward for a toast, ok?

    Love, Love, Love,

    ♥ Robin ♥

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  8. Annie, I am SO glad this made you laugh because it was supposed to! Xoxo

    Suki, I think you are totally correct! Xoxo

    Robin, I love seeing different reactions to this scene. Don't forget this war story is about Casey and Catherine. I am just the teller of it. Xoxo

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  9. Oh robin, about the weekend: what fun! We will blow kisses all the way to San Fran

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  10. There can be such a thing as irreconcilable differences, it's just that sometimes you don't want to notice them early in the peace.

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  11. oh kj, your 'snippet' is a loaded one! you've sure got me hooked and interested in where next your friends will go.
    I began and finished The Light Stays On this week, in one "I can't put this down" day! A story that fully celebrates the human experiences of loneliness, friendship, love, loss, joy... ultimately seeking, finding and honoring one's truest path, with characters that I grew with and loved. You are a masterful story teller, a painter of words, my friend! sending love, Karin

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  12. I don't really understand their friendship... why they feel so comfortable being so angry with each other.

    great piece of writing :)

    love to you my beautiful friend x

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  13. Give us more kj!!!
    What was Catherine doing in Malaysia (apart from Girl Scouting- Persatuan Pandu Puteri Malaysia -PPPM, Girl Guides Malaysia)?!

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  14. I have certainly said my share of mindless things that sound dismissive. The key is - can the other person accept an apology and explanation, or do they stay mad regardless?

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  15. hi kj! it feels like i've been away forever. i'm home now and having fun catching up. your writing is SO good, it is so readable and interesting. it must feel good to you to be adding to your book. is this going to be a book? i can't wait for it if it is.

    love you,
    lori

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