Monday, March 05, 2012

A Writer's Best Friend

I wrote this in my Monday night writer's group. I was thinking about brevity and some of the things I've learned about the craft of writing. Because I haven't figured out spellcheck yet on my new laptop, I apologize in advance for any misspelled words.

Who the heck is the narrator in this poem? That may be the silliness of it all.

Love kj



Take me on vacation

I’ll toss a proclamation

I’ll show you how to flutter,

to mutter, to stutter,

I’ll astonish, admonish, and stew.


I know how to be bold

slicing through the ice cold

I’ll be here when your colors run dry.

I’ll tackle and spackle

fractile and cackle

Together we’ll casade into blue


I won’t let you down,

Even way across town

I’ll tilt and I’ll twist and I’ll rant

We’ll regret, we’ll beset, we’ll procure on a bet

Cast the wind, fall on sin, refuse to give in

and guess what, I’ll stand up with you.


I’m a friend, don’t you know

I make sentences blow

I reduce strength to whimper,

can embellish a temper,

rend hearts to a crimper

make sunsets look limper,

all this with the glide of guess who


Forget all those words

that describe the absurd

Not needed or deeded or grand.

For half of the price I’ll show you not nice

pontificate trice, slam and damn the whole alice

Squeeze the story inside a brown shoe.


Do you see me unbutton

the bone from the mutton?

Banish those fancies, abscond all those prancies,

hose adverbs as dandies

Obliterate adjectives, admonish the tranies:

Allow me to conjugate too.


But this once I except;

take my bow and my step.

I’ll allow one embellished like word

I deserve all this credit

With me there’s no debit

Because I’m absofuckinglutely a VERB!

32 comments:

  1. forgive me: ahahahahahahaheeheehaha

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  2. Oh, goodness me. I feel totally lost somewhere between Times Square and the Mission District. Verb, can you help me? And maybe we'll find emily rabbit in the process, too.

    Overwhelmed Bear trundles out.

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    1. Mr bear, verb says squish into fun. YOUR don't think you're lost.

      You get an A plus for the word 'trundle'!!!!

      ? On Emily, where oh where?

      Xo

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    2. Oh dear , garbled words. I meant to say I don't think you're lost :-)

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  3. I have no clue...... :)
    ♥M

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    1. Oh dear. So much for my personification of mr or ms Verb :-)

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    1. Julie! I wrote it! Haha, why, does it sound masculine? Maybe Verb is a guy :-)

      Ps I owe you a thousand visits xoxo

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  5. You had me guessing until the very end! This was just great fun and I bet it was fun to write, too. :)

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    1. Kiss kiss Lydia, thank you! I was written in less than an hour, and yes it was fun. But I don't think I made the message about the weakness of adv and adj in favor of strong verbs :-)

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  6. I love this, kj! I think my favorite line is: "Do you see me unbutton
    the bone from the mutton?" I'm also very fond of "Squeeze the story inside a brown shoe." Hee hee!
    xox Pam

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    1. Pam, thank you, thank you. I like those zany lines too. I should write more like that; probably more sense than I make otherwise !

      Hope your writing is going a okay, prudie1

      Xoxo

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  7. you a just so clever. love all the word play, MS Verb!

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    1. Why thank you ms modifier :-)

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  8. This one cries out to be set to music.

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    1. Dim dum dum dum dum

      Oh what a good idea! :-)

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  9. KJ...I love it when you create your own, special WORDPLAY! You have a tremendous gift for it! Special kudos for using the Grammatical Names!!! I feel your inner-child spirit is returning!
    (This makes Emilwee happy!) And....me too!

    Love,

    ♥ Robin ♥

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    1. Thanks robin. This is my ode to verbs ! :-)

      Xoxo

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  10. heheheheheeeee! You're just plain silly with a capital S! That's one of the things I love about you ;)♥

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    1. Lo, hee hee, you are as silly as I am. Great minds, you know.... :-)

      Xoxo

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  11. You're forgiven.
    ;-D
    giggle

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    1. babs, well that's a relief :^)

      do you know i lived in norman for two years? you probably did know, right?

      xoxo

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  12. hahahaha...supsense poem :P unbutton the mutton..hahahaha

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  13. what a great comment! you made me laugh be cause you got it!!!!

    time to come visit you, been a while ♥

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  14. lovely blog u have KJ
    most awesome thing about your writing is the way u play with words because only few people can do that :)

    looking forward to new posts !!

    fantastic ending
    Because I’m absofuckinglutely a VERB :D

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    1. thank you and welcome, jyoti. i'm glad you liked that last line, it was the first line i thought of!

      i look forward to your scribbles ♥

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  15. "Because I’m absofuckinglutely a VERB"

    Dont we all wish this was us....and that is a brilliant line by the way;-)

    Wander

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  16. Darlin this is, of course, wonderful.... The metaphors are particularly fetching! Come on over...a little post for Miss R...

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    1. I'll be a coming' chrisy!!!

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  17. Such a cute, fun poem! Wonderful word play :) I do like the playful tone and point of view, for sure. I particularly like the "obliterate adjectives, admonish the tranies/allow me to conjugate too" line. Such great usage of these words!

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    1. Thanks a million ms Phoenix xo

      And your one brave thing: thanks for that too.

      Ps I am super super happy for you
      :-)

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