Ever since I went to the poetry manuscript weekend almost a year ago, where I learned my poetry was, shall we say, "unfinished," and that rhyming was out of fashion, I haven't written poems the way I used to. Okay, there are probably other factors too, but in any case, here's a re-visited poem I thought then and still think is moderately clever. You may or may not agree:
Can’t Do
Could you?
I’m at the beginning:
Accept, Accelerate, Acquiesce,
and sprinting to the L’s,
Long, Loosen, Lighten up,
Onto to the T’s:
Trust, Turn in, Truncate,
Then to the final stop:
Zero. Zilch. Zenith.
I am plucking words,
Seeking sounds,
And mixing colors
To explain why oh why
You are there
And I am here
And the in-between
Is alphabetically and phonetically speaking
All Wrong.
Ouch! Thats so well polished - its sharp!
ReplyDeleteIt packs its punch and has a great rhythm too - Bravo!
It is a great little poem KJ
ReplyDeleteTake the critiques will a pinch of salt - I can say that now my friends have helped to repair all the damage I have incurred.
Write for yourself and enjoy :D
Personally I wouldn't know a good poem from a drover's boot but do what you like I say. As for rhyming being old fashioned . . .what silliness.
ReplyDeleteThat is a nice one !
ReplyDeleteCongratulations KJ - I keep my fingers crossed that your new President meets your expectations :D
ReplyDeleteI like it.
ReplyDeleteAnd I'm kind of liking today, too.
WOW!
ReplyDeleteit IS a great poem...
when you come to the end... a kind of realization happens... your mind finds something to chew on...
this is the job of good art works...
the in-between.... yes indeed....
a perfectly wonderful poem!!!
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